Descriptive writing

This term we have had to put our self in to a writing workshop. In my work shop we had to write three sentences our more of a piture that we had.

This is my descriptive writing.

The slow white running water fall dribbles down the side of the huge rock.  As the rocks crumble down they hit the side of the cliff  and crumble into the tiniest piece of sand. when they hit the water they make a loud sudden plop!